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BriezyPosted on 07/03/08 at 05:12:07

Any feedback, positive or negative?  Thanks.

Monday Mayhem <7/7/08>

MCW President Matt James begins the show in the center of the ring.  He welcomes everyone to MCW.  In light of the drastic changes in professional wrestling recently, James says he has accumulated an incredible roster full of young, eager talent.  He says that throughout the night he will be hosting the show and introducing everyone to the talent.  He promises an imphasis on youth and in ring ability.  Starting tonight, we will have first round matches in a tournament to crown the first ever MCW champion.  He promises a shocker for tonight's main event.  James introduces the announce team of Mike Goldberg and Roddy Piper!

<Commercial Break>

Nigel McGuinness pinned Evan Bourne after a Victory Roll in 0:00:11.
Rating: *

Backstage, a hot new reporter, Carmen, is joined by Cody & Dusty Rhodes!  Dusty gets a huge pop.  He says that he has grounded Cody and will not allow his career to go off course again.  He says he has instilled his work ethic in Cody and will lead him to the "pay window" later tonight!

<Commercial Break>

Matt James introduces Petey Williams as the newest member of MCW!  He calls him one of the most exciting performers in the business.  His opponent is a "blue chipper"...Shelton Benjamin!

Shelton Benjamin defeated Petey Williams by disqualification in 0:08:56.
Rating: *

<Commercial Break>

Backstage, Carmen is joined by Jamie Noble and Mike Knox.  Both are dressed in camo like they just came back from hunting.  Noble gets cocky and says that his hunting partner "Mikey" is like thunder to his "lightning".  Noble says that together they have the power and speed to beat any team in the MCW.  They head to the ring where The Briscoe Brothers await.

The Briscoe Brothers defeated Thunder & Lightning when J. Briscoe pinned M. Knox
after a vertical facebuster in 0:10:23.
Rating: 3/4*

Noble and Knox argue in the ring as the Briscoe's celebrate to the crowds approval.

Backstage:  Matt Striker walks up to President James accompanied by 2 men.  He introduces himself as an "agent" and says the two men with him are his "clients" Elijah Burke and Matt Morgan.  He says they are the most talented tag team in the world and James needs to give them a chance.  He wants to put his talented "Agency" on the map here in MCW.  James agrees to give them a chance.

<Commercial>

Matt James says his next talent will give MCW a "reality check"....it's THE MIZ!

The Miz made Bryan Danielson submit to an armbar submission in 0:08:53.
Rating: ** 1/2

<Commercial>

President James announces the opponents for The Agency as...Cryme Tyme!

Cryme Tyme defeated The Agency (Elijah Burke and Matt Morgan) when JTG pinned
E. Burke after the G 9 in 0:18:24 after Striker tried to interfere with a briefcase that was stolen by Shad, who then used it to nail Burke.
Rating: -** 1/2

<Commercial>

MCW Title First Round Matchup:
Cody Rhodes pinned John Morrison after a figure-four leglock in 0:10:10.
Rating: -* 1/2

Dusty congratulates Cody on his victory.

<Commercial>

Matt James says he promised a major acquisition for tonight's main event.  It is none other than TITO ORTIZ!  The crowd explodes!  Ortiz comes to the ring waving a Mexican and an American flag, wearing his trademark black shorts with orange flames.

MCW Title First Round Matchup:
Tito Ortiz made Lance Cade submit to an armbar submission in 0:12:50.
Rating: *

Tito stands on the top turnbuckle waving the flags to an incredible ovation as the show goes off air.
BriezyPosted on 07/04/08 at 06:38:20

Alright, guess i'll take that as "it sucks" and ill go back to the drawing board.
Rick GarrardPosted on 07/04/08 at 06:43:55

If you are only posting here to get replies, you've come to the wrong place.  I've got a LOT of cards posted that had either very few or 0 replies.  Just becuase no one replies, does not mean they are not reading your work.  It usually takes a few cards before folks comment just so they can get a feel for your booking style.
UnrightPosted on 07/04/08 at 07:20:19

On 07/04/08 at 06:38:20, Briezy wrote:Alright, guess i'll take that as "it sucks" and ill go back to the drawing board.
It's fine.

Couple of observations...

Which "drastic changes in professional wrestling" are you speaking of? Judging by the roster and the fact that a circuit's first show is televised, it seems like a lot took place. Now very few feds here bother with backstories, but I found it odd that you eluded to one without providing it.

An 11 second first match? I'm guessing you're running unbooked, and that's fine. But you might want to hit the 'e' button to extend the match a little bit.  Plus Matt James just promised to introduce his roster to us... Who was that Nigel guy? Is he some sort of unstoppable badass? It seemed like he was on screen for about 15 seconds, then it cut to the back for 3 minute segment, then back to commercial. WTF?

Petey & Shelton.. Good stuff. What was the DQ for?

To tell the truth, I'm not a big fan of the "Thunder & Lightning" name. The hunting gimmick seems like it could lend itself to a better name. But I guess it may be moot as there is dissent already....

I dig the Striker/Burke/Morgan pairing. Could work out good. Striker is an awesome manager.

Miz over Danielson? Oy.. I'll let that slide..

Cryme Tyme shenanigans.. I like it. I'm guessing they are faces in the organization, since the Agency must be heels.

Giving Cody a strong push off the bat against more established stars.. I'll be interesting if that comes back and bites him.

Tito Ortiz is an interesting big star choice. It's definately unique. Since we only saw two matches of the championship tournament, I'm guessing you've got a few more stars tucked away in your sleeves.

Overall, it's a fine start. The commercial breaks are a little annoying because you've got them spaced out way too evenly. It's okay to have two matches between commercials.

Also just to echo a bit of what Rick said... Remember that you are your main audience for your fed. If you're dependent on feedback to decide what to do next, then your circuit is doomed to failure. I gave your card some pretty thorough because I was kinda bored and just in the mood to do so. So don't always expect it.
BriezyPosted on 07/04/08 at 16:42:09

Thanks for the feedback.  Appreciate it and will put it to use.
BriezyPosted on 07/04/08 at 22:59:00

Monday Mayhem <7/14/08>

The show starts with Matt James in the ring once again.  He congratulates Tito Ortiz and Cody Rhodes on advancing to the second round of the MCW title tournament. The 16-man tournament will wrap up at the first Pay-Per-View, Gold Rush 2008.  There will be a total of 8 opening round matchups.  The 8 winners will compete in a tournament live in one night.  Tito Ortiz' music hits and he makes his way to the ring.  Tito thanks James for the opportunity to compete in MCW.  He said he is glad to have a boss that appreciates his talents, unlike his last president.

*KENNEDY*

Ken Kennedy walks out onto the stage!  Kennedy is a member of MCW!  He says Tito can stop kissing Matt James' ass.  He says if Tito thinks his experiences in the UFC are going to do him any good in professional wrestling he has another thing coming.  Kennedy claims to be a bigger, faster, and stronger athlete than anyone Tito has been in the cage with.  Kennedy says Tito's career in wrestling will go just like his career in the UFC ended....he just won't be able to cut it.  Kennedy receives major heat from the crowd.  Tito tries to go after Kennedy but James holds him back.  James says Tito Ortiz will face Kennedy in the main event later tonight!

<Commercial>

Earlier today backstage segment:  Matt James seeks out Bryan Danielson.  He tells Bryan that he brought him to MCW because he is a huge fan of his work.  James says he has created a Light Heavyweight Title for people just like Danielson and knows he can be a bigtime player in Mayhem.  Danielson says he has put last weeks loss to The Miz behind him.  James says thats good and he will have another chance to impress him tonight.  Danielson promises to not disappoint.

Bryan Danielson pinned Lance Cade after an elbowsmash from the top rope in 0:13:49.
Rating: * 1/2

After the match, Danielson gets on the mic and says that he wants the Light Heavyweight Title and will do whatever it takes to get it.

<Commercial>

We see Matt James in his office.  Matt Striker busts in he room along with The Agency, Matt Morgan and Elijah Burke.  He demands James give his team a rematch with Cryme Tyme after the way they "cheated" last week in order to pull out the victory.  James says all Cryme Tyme did was use the weapon Striker intended for his own team to use.  James asks if Striker believes they deserve a rematch.  Striker says they will work the match for free just to get in the ring again with JTG and Shad.  James says they can have the match but will work for free from now through Gold Rush 2008.  Striker agrees.  James says the match will happen after the next bout.  They exit the office and Striker catches plenty of flack from his clients about the raw deal he negotiated.

Petey Williams pinned Evan Bourne after a Victory Roll in 0:09:36.
Rating: ** 3/4

[Return Match]:
Cryme Tyme defeated The Agency (Elijah Burke and Matt Morgan) when S. Gaspard
pinned E. Burke with the Spinebuster Slam in 0:07:47 after Striker tried to interfere and unintentionally hit Elijah Burke instead.
Rating: -** 1/4

Striker jumps in the ring and The Agency attacks Cryme Tyme.  Morgan Powerslams both members onto a steel chair laid out by Elijah.

<Commercial Break>

Cody Rhodes is being interviewed backstage, along with "The American Dream" Dusty Rhodes.  Cody puts over Dusty for helping him get to this point of his career and in advancing last week to the second round of the MCW Title Tournament.  Cody says he wants to prove himself again tonight against an opponent who looked mighty impressive last week, Nigel McGuiness.

Cody Rhodes pinned Nigel McGuinness after a short lariat in 0:05:43.
Rating: * 1/2

Backstage, Carmen is joined by a new superstar, Ted DiBiase Jr.  Ted says that he comes from a family of winners and a family of cold hard cash.  Ted Jr. says he is no different and possesses talent that money can't buy.  He says that next week he will have his opportunity to advance in the MCW Title Tournament.  He says that his debut will be nothing short of "Priceless".

<Commercial>

Matt James comes to the stage and announces his latest acquisition...."The Jamaican Sensation" Kofi Kingston!

MCW Title First Round Matchup:
Kofi Kingston made The Miz submit to a side headlock in 0:04:51.
Rating: 1/4*

Vignette:  We see a man in a club drinking a dark colored mixed drink.  He is approached by a gorgeous woman asking him for his number.  The man laughs and says "don't you wish you were good enough to be with me, honey?".  He then walks up to two twins and snaps his fingers.  They each grab an arm and escort him to the dance floor.  We cut to a screen reading - Coming Soon, "God's Gift To Women" Robert Roode.

Shelton Benjamin is in the ring waiting for his opponent.  He starts to laugh and gets on the mic.  Shelton says that someone did a very smart thing in not showing up.  He says he guesses that he has advanced to the second round of the tournament by default.  He says the crowd didn't deserve to see him wrestle anyway.  Crowd boos.  Familiar music hits...it's MATT HARDY.  Matt Hardy is a member of MCW and is Shelton Benjamin's opponent!

MCW Title First Round Matchup:
Matt Hardy and Shelton Benjamin battled to a double countout in 0:03:53.
Rating: 3/4*

Shelton and Hardy battle up the aisle until security breaks them up.  Matt James comes in to help break things up.  He says he cannot have these matches ending by DQ or countout.  Next week, Hardy and Benjamin will battle with No-DQ and No-Countouts to determine who advances!

<Commercial>

Tito Ortiz pinned Ken Kennedy after a Belly to Belly Suplex in 0:15:00.
Rating: ** 1/4

Tito Ortiz celebrates on the top turnbuckle.  Out of the crowd a man comes in a nails Tito off the top.  It's Sid Vicious!  Powerbomb!  He helps Kennedy up and raises Kennedy's arm as the show goes off air.
91Posted on 07/05/08 at 01:28:20

On 07/04/08 at 06:38:20, Briezy wrote:Alright, guess i'll take that as "it sucks" and ill go back to the drawing board.
I'll come back to this.

The shows, as Unright said, were fine. It always takes a while for anyone to get into a rhythm but you've made the effort to at least present the gist of almost everybodies character at some point and made it clear what their allignment is, whilst also putting over who the big players are, and you've actually done this pretty well, and that's all you can ask for this early on.

Also, the fact you took note of what Unright said about the DQ finish on the first show and then explained the finish to the Cryme Tyme match in the second showed you were paying attention. And Tito Ortiz does indeed make a unique main attraction for a TNM fed, that leaves a lot of potential. So yes, is all fine so far.

Going back to your original comment though, as Rick has touched on, feedback is always nice but not something you're going to get inundated with on each show and not something that most people here are overly bothered about. But taking that further, in the 25 hours between you posting and you determining that because nobody replied in that time that everyone must have thought the show sucked - how many cards did you reply to? Being that the answer is "none" does that mean you think everyone elses cards suck? Probably not, but I'm sure you can see where I'm coming from.
Rick GarrardPosted on 07/05/08 at 06:24:44

On 07/05/08 at 01:28:20, 91 wrote:Going back to your original comment though, as Rick has touched on, feedback is always nice but not something you're going to get inundated with on each show and not something that most people here are overly bothered about. But taking that further, in the 25 hours between you posting and you determining that because nobody replied in that time that everyone must have thought the show sucked - how many cards did you reply to? Being that the answer is "none" does that mean you think everyone elses cards suck? Probably not, but I'm sure you can see where I'm coming from.
Exactly, 91.  Take for example my PWW circuit I am currently "reposting" from 1998 when I first ran it.  Comments on any cards = 0.  Is that going to stop me from posting the rest?  No... mainly because I am working on making a "definitive collection" of every card I've done and posted from TNM.  Do I post comments on other's circuits?  Very rarely.  It's gotta be something that either totally blows me away as far as matches and/or gimmicks go, or its more likely a circuit that is using one my many rules sets.  (Now I'm starting to feel like Jonh C. Dvorak... http://www.dvorak.org/blog for those of you podcast listeners that get the joke)  :)
BriezyPosted on 07/07/08 at 21:58:50

Monday Mayhem <7/21/08>

Ken Kennedy makes his way to the ring with his Sid Vicious.  He says he has come to MCW with Sid as an insurance policy.  Says Tito Ortiz needs to pay his dues and that is what caused the attack last week.  Sid says Tito won't be here tonight and advises he doesn't return.  Tito runs in from the crowd just ike Sid did last week!  He chases the duo out of the ring.  Tito challenges them to a handi-capped match tonight!  Kennedy says Tito is crazy.  Tito says he doesn't give a damn.  Kennedy and Sid accept!

Thunder & Lightning (Jamie Noble & Mike Knox) and The Canadian Bulldogs (David Harry Smith & T.J. Wilson) battled to a draw in 0:20:00.
Rating: 1/2*

They continue to fight until security breaks them up!  They can't get enough action!

<Commercial Break>

Matt James runs into Matt Striker and The Agency backstage.  Striker is once again angry about the antics of Cryme Tyme, claiming innocence of any wrong doing.  James says Striker offered The Agency's services for free to get a rematch and he has nothing more to offer up as collateral.  Striker says he can promise James and MCW a blue-chipper next week if James agrees to give Matt Morgan a shot at one of the Cryme Tyme members tonight!  James asks who he has in mind.  Striker whispers so that only James can hear.  James' eye brows raise.  James says Striker has himself a deal.

Evan Bourne pinned Bryan Danielson after a German suplex in 0:10:24.
Rating: ****

Bryan Danielson is angry about his loss.  Matt James comes out and says he is incredibly impressed with their match (Four-Stars).  He says this match is what MCW is all about.  He says Danielson and Bourne will meet in a rematch for the Light Heavyweight Title at Gold Rush!

<Commercial Break>

Shad Gaspard pinned Matt Morgan after a backdrop on a chair in 0:10:53.  
Rating: -** 1/2

The Agency is outsmarted by Cryme Time one more time!

Vignette:  "God's Gift To Women" Robert Roode is coming to MCW next week!

Backstage, Carmen is joined by Ted DiBiase Jr.  DiBiase says he doesn't care who his opponent is tonight, he will have a "priceless" debut and go on to win the MCW Title.

<Commercial>

DiBiase is in the ring awaiting his opponent.  James comes out on the stage and announces the opponent as none other than D'Lo Brown!

As the match begins, Dusty and Cody Rhodes make their way to ringside.  They join Mike Goldberg and Roddy Piper at the announce table.  Cody says he has been informed he will face the winner of this match.

MCW Title First Round Matchup:
D'Lo Brown pinned Ted DiBiase Jr. with the Lo-Down in 0:12:47.
Rating: -1/4*

DiBiase can't believe he lost!  He attacks D'Lo as he celebrates.  Dusty and Cody make the save.  Cody shakes D'Lo's hand and says it will be an honor to face him.  Dusty shakes D'Lo's hand as well.

<Commercial>

Nigel comes out first.  Familar music hits and CM Punk comes out!  The crowd goes balistic!

MCW Title First Round Matchup:
CM Punk pinned Nigel McGuinness after a short lariat in 0:06:59.
Rating: * 1/2

Punk celebrates to a huge reaction.

We see Shelton Benjamin and Matt Hardy preparing for their high stakes rematch.  That is up next!

<Commercial>

MCW Title First Round Matchup - RETURN MATCH:
No-Time-Limit-No-Countout-No-DQ-Match:
Shelton Benjamin pinned Matt Hardy with the Paydirt in 0:12:17.
Rating: * 1/2

Matt Hardy looks frustrated.  He is visibly upset.  Shelton mocks him as he walks back up the ramp.

<Commercial>

Handicap-Match:
Tito Ortiz defeated Ken Kennedy and Sid Vicious when Ortiz defeated Vicious by
disqualification in 0:02:30 after both men refused to leave the ring and continued to double team Ortiz.
Rating: -**

After the match, Kennedy hits Ortiz with the ring bell and busts him open.  Sid signals for the Mic Check.  Kennedy with the Mic Check on the ring bell!  Will Tito even make it to Gold Rush 2008 in just 13 days?!
JoshiQPosted on 07/09/08 at 00:38:05

Your second show really helped turn this fed around, I think. It was well done. I am still trying to get use to Tito Ortiz being involved in a wrestling circuit, but it's working out okay so far.

Anyways, looking forward to seeing what else you have planned.